Unexplained sentences I've written--and clearly should delete

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I ran across this in my WIP. What does it even mean? I have no clue. Anyone have these kind of gems buried in their stories? 

He walked along his personal road like a visitor—passing through—a mannequin placed here, then there, looking the part of whatever needed done. He had been living some fantasy life and forgot his real one.

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